Page 3 Rough

Above is a good example of what happens when initially, the rough layout wasn’t as effective for the narrative. I realized that just showing the actual domino effect, as well as showing an abstract depiction of what it actually would feel like for someone with a botched suicide attempt to live in society (obscuring the face by repeating the eyes) in a non-exploitative way would be far more effective for the narrative. Plus, this allowed me to create a much stronger visual line on the over all page by having that snake like line of dominoes lead your eye. As you can see, I made lots of changes from the initial rough to the final, and think the page is far better for it. What do you think?